I thought the book was in pretty good shape, then I took the step to read it out loud to check the flow.
My god, it's incomorehensible.
I taped myself reading it with the plan that if I heard something wrong I would interrupt myself, say the word "wrong," comment, then bookend my comment with another "wrong" -- that way I could have Word transcribe the recording, I could search for the word "wrong," and make the edits.
I thought I'd say "wrong" once a page. Nope. Every single sentence got a "wrong." Some got "Wrong wrong wrong." Some got "Jesus God what is wrong with you?"
And sometimes it started out bad and was interrupted by breaking news, as it was last week. Here is a raw transcription, with no punctuation, and spelling done by computer automation unfamiliar with soccer.
"And sometimes it wasn't his fault he was a fool people leave when it isn't their fault all the time like when they die it still hurts WRONG that whole sentence is peculiar and obviously I'm not wanting to deal with the whole abandonment business Jesus God what is wrong with you get some therapy get into that and what is this ding about oh paylays dead damn hang on a second I need to text people that paylay is dead that's a shame OK back to the book WRONG."